zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict

Teen: mild violence, suggestive themes, use of chocolate
Content Rated By ESRB(trademark used without permission)

i rated it myself XD
the story tells about one character and it's two companions
the main character is selected by you and the first part of the story changes depending of your main but the ending varies depending of some actions
main characters
Ray

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class:blader-duke
complete name: Raymond Matthew Green
age:16
sex:m
weapon of choice:two handed blade
birth:jul/3
character:he's a trainee swordsman whose temper leds him to weary situations, he is very nice with people but very insecure of himself
he is one of the three choices for leadership, if you chose him the game will contain more fighting then everything, he's a great warrior but can't hold against lots of enemies, he's one of the only duke class characters and after he change classes he is unstoppable
BIO:he is the son of a great friend of arthur's: who asked him to train ray, althought he's the youngest of his brothers, he has an innate talent yet undiscovered, when he joins the armada, he learns fom everyone and grows to a matture level, and his story begins
his chosen weapon is the bastard sword

May

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class:knight-commander
complete name: mai raijin
age:16
sex:f
weapon of choice:knight lance
birth:oct/30
character:she's a natural leader but she stills lack of self-confidence, she tinks too well at the situations and always has a solution, but dislike when things goes wrong because of her
playing: she is one of the three mains to chose as leader, if you choose her the game will be more about tactics ad less fighting but still she'll have to take many enemies down
BIO:at a young age she joined the Tamallian army to bring money to her family, but after the war she loses her beloved commander Glen, then she came to the New Troy island to be trained, then she met Arthur who decided to train her as a knight to return to the army.
her chosen weapon is the holy lance of xandria

Yayo

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class-thief-spy
complete name:unknown(he calls himself lord Yayo of the llamas, don't ask why)
age:14
sex:m
weapon of choice: long dagger
birth date:jun/28
character: nice kid, always trying to make everbody laugh, but he does a lot of thing than bring the team to the trouble, like stealing things when not asked for
playing: the last one of the three guys to choose, with him it'll be more about exploring and retrieving items, still he has to fight, but he's not good at that, but when he changes to spy class, he'll be a great fighter
his weapon of choice is the famous stilleto dagger
BIO:he was a former memer of a thieves band called the Deceivers, this band endlessly steals people's goods for surveying, but after he tried to steal arthur , he was caught and in order to set free he has to become his personal spy

other
Arthur

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class:master
complete name:Arthur Raphael Lionerth
age:29
sex:m
weapon of choice:longsword
birth date:feb/2
character: he is a teacher of life lessons and likes to joke when he can, he's always there to help
playing:he's the teacher of your main and the two of your characters, he leads the armada and he's the strongest fighter, but he only helps you when you REALLY heed him
BIO:he was once known on this world as the leader of the most famous traveling heroes group; the Armada XVI, after he left, all around how he got his mysterious armor and how he grow that strong remains unknown....
his weapon of choice is the sword than chose him, th Urkhassus, another enigmatic item

Geoff

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class:bowmen-hunter/freeshoter
complete name:Geoffen Von Elwood
age:17
sex:m
weapon of choice: short bow
birth date:dec:19
character:a little grouchy, he tries to live quietly but he also wants not to be a burden, he's very talented but very lazy
BIO:he was the son of the mayor of New Troy who died the last battle in hands of a evil wizard, after that he joined Arthur to grow and soon become the mayor, but he hadn't the chance, now he's the keeper of the three kids and that's why he has a brotherhood's loathe against Arthur
his weapon of choice is a wooden bow

Blade:

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class:raider-verdugo
complete name:Elvira Maria Alexandre(she calls herself Blader cause that name embarasses her)
age:17
sex:f
weapon of choice:giant ax
birth date:apr/22
character:excessive outgoing, she's alwas energetic and never stop training, she has an unhuman strenght from her father whose she is trying to make proud, also, she tends to be a bit silly sometimes
BIO:she requested his father to join Arthur on his journey, now she's the co-keeper of the new heroes alongside Geoff
her weapon oif choice is the Barbussei, the master axe

Razor

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class:verdugo
complete name: Reznor Franchesco Alexandre(formerly known as General Razor/ now he's known as Big Daddy/Blade's father, good guess)
age:42(kinda old the dude)
sex:m
weapon of choice:any axe or pole blade he can brandish
birth date:aug/13
character:just as energeic and strong as his daughter, this guy likes to live freely and become stronger, but he's also a serious man when the situation hard, he dislike cowardly more than anything so he tries to make everyone become strong in his team
BIO: he was a fearsome general in charge of an army who tried to take over Tamallia, the larges territory of the continent, but he was beaten by Arthur and the Armada XVI, now he's a member of his new armada and personal craftsman
his weapon of choice is the PaPa Blade, his personal axe

Karie

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class:duke
complete name: her real name is unknown, but she was called Karen Angelo when she was adopted
age:apparently 18
sex:f
weapon of choice:rapier and massive shield
birth date:may/29
character:generally she's always calm and only knowns the happiness and sadness, no other emotions can she feel
BIO:we don't know, the only thing we know she was beside arthur 3 years before i (the main character)
her weapon of choice is the astral shield and the valkyrie's sword
(ILLUSTRATION PENDING)

Enemies
Rouzen

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class:dark god
complete name:Rouzen Kisemerh, the dark god
age:his appearance suggest 32 years
sex:m(maybe)
weapon of choice:rapier
birth date:jan/1
character:Excessively evil, only acts for someone's demise, he is a very smart and strong person and due to his power he never feels fear of anything, even when he's at disadvantage, he is immortal and his only desire is to finally find a end to his life and for that he provokes the world to stop him, he has a connection to the enigmatic story of Arthur
BIO:nothing, only he knows about him
his weapon of choice is the half-part of the Urkhassus, the Fimmbaal

the story
Arthur is a well-known hero in the continent of (name not decided yet), after he accomplished his unknown objective, his only mission was to take care of three kids who wants to grow strongers beside him.

They were selected to missions in charge of Blade and Geoff, experienced warriors who knew Arthur long ago, their missions were from protecting villages to chase bounty hunters. After that a big mission came around, it happens than someone is scheming to take over the kingdom of Tamallia, this man name was Lord Vellian, a sorcerer with mischievous powers, after they chase after him they find out than Vellian is under control of Rouzen whose happens to be a Dark God, the three heroes asked Arthur for answers but he sem not wiling to answer.
the three heroes researched on Arthur's personal library and then they found out than...

_ He is the Astral hero who once fought the odds to bring safety to the galaxy, than he fought along and against gods, and than Rouzen was behind all of that, Rouzen is the god who rules the Dark Nebula:a place when evil returns after death

All of this was impossible to believe, then Karie, Arthur's main assistant explained them about that, seeking for the truth the heroes chase after Arthur and then they winess a battle between Those Two.
Rouzen defeted arthur and said: these kids know about us, perhaps they will be as fun as you are. And then he fled, arthur then told them all he knows, three days passed and Arthur discovered where Rouzen was and he chased after him, the heroes were going to help him but he said:
_No, you guys stay here, this is far more dangerous than you think, wait for me, i'll be back
the guys ignored his advice and silently they followed him, he catch them at the time he knew they were there, he said then:
- Ah, guess i can't stop you, well you may come but do not interfere, stay hide, don't let he see you guys, this one is SERIOUSLY,
at the time they fought rouzen said, do you know why i came here?
Arthur said then: to take me down finally
nope, i came here to provoke the powers of the Astral Flux,
arthur seems impressed, then he continued speaking
- the astral flux is the main source of energy of the entire universe, if the astrral flux sees there's a power then may cause problems to the galaxy, then it'll explode and destroy all in there, even the gods
So, i decided to use that power to bring the world down by once
and then Rouzen showed up all of his collosal power, which warned the astral flux, and then the explosion started
...........it..is.....i..it's over?
Not yet
rouzen apparently drained the powers of the astral flux with the explosion
and he said: At last, i am the strongest being in existence, if yoy still think you can stand against me, come to my castle at the top of the mountain, till now Survive When You Still Can. and he left flying with spreaded crimson wings
looks like the time has come to us to stand against the very power than rules us: Arthur said
the heroes, and the other warriors of Arthur's armada stand now in front of the Great Door Of Divinity, ready for the final showdown with the Perfect One. and so the story follows it's end
the door opens in front of arthur and his comrades, they get into the castle, and they face all kind of ordeals, they're attacked by soldiers and monsters, as the battle grow fierce they marched forward looking for the key than opens the Last Frontier Door, then they faced enemies from the past, and after they struggled them to death the key appeared at the lock, the Door opened by itself and a cold air blewed from the entrance.
there is he waiting for the heroes, no more turning back from this point
- Congratulations, you made it, i was sure you would surely overcome the trials, but, no matter how much power you do have, i have more, and the faith you have won't save you, for all your hope dies here, and your fate is under my Divine judgement: final quote from Rouzen, and then the final showdown begins

Nice drawings, they're awesome. And the sprites are great too.
Except.... Razor... His sprites horrify me.

The drawings are amazing. Some sprites could use work though.

Geoffen's face looks like he has a few mental issues in the drawing.

CRaTeR wrote:

Geoffen's face looks like he has a few mental issues in the drawing.

Surely
guys, i've posted the storyline, check it out

zilch wrote:

Congratulations, you made it, i was sure you would surely overcome the trials, but, no matter how much power you do have, i have more, and the faith you have won't save you, for all your hope dies here, and your fate is under my Divine judgement

how does this sounds?

It sounds grammatically painful.

zilch wrote:

zilch wrote:

Congratulations, you made it, i was sure you would surely overcome the trials, but, no matter how much power you do have, i have more, and the faith you have won't save you, for all your hope dies here, and your fate is under my Divine judgement

how does this sounds?

.....
Do you pass English class?
I tried editing it a bit:

"Congratulations, you made it. I was sure you would overcome the trials, but no matter how much power you do have, I hold more, your the faith won't save you, for all your hopes die here; under my Divine Judgment lies your fate."

I haven't had English in a while either, its coming up in my next semester.

ShadowKirby wrote:

zilch wrote:

zilch wrote:

Congratulations, you made it, i was sure you would surely overcome the trials, but, no matter how much power you do have, i have more, and the faith you have won't save you, for all your hope dies here, and your fate is under my Divine judgement

how does this sounds?

.....
Do you pass English class?
I tried editing it a bit:

"Congratulations, you made it. I was sure you would overcome the trials, but no matter how much power you do have, I hold more, your the faith won't save you, for all your hopes die here; under my Divine Judgment lies your fate."

I haven't had English in a while either, its coming up in my next semester.

I edited it a bit more to be more of a passive voice.


"Congratulations, you have made it. I was sure you would overcome the trials, but despite how much power you grasp, I have more; your faith won't save you, for all your hopes die here - under my Divine Judgment lies your fate."

I grammar nazi'd a bit too.

That's much better.

<Na>Suliboy wrote:

I edited it a bit more to be more of a passive voice.


"Congratulations, you have made it. I was sure you would overcome the trials, but despite how much power you grasp, I have more; your faith won't save you, for all your hopes die here - under my Divine Judgment lies your fate."

I grammar nazi'd a bit too.

damn, english classes won't help me up with this of dramatic quotes
curse...you...zelda, curse...you...sages, curse.. you....... suli
when my grammar improves to a proffesional level, i will return and insult your descendants,
as long as i have the keyboard in my hand

Lolwut, you'll need a lot of help.

I love the storyline, but the grammar needs to be revised a little

Amamihe wrote:

I love the storyline, but the grammar needs to be revised a little

Last post was in September of last year, you sir, can choke on a dick.