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zilch

Posts : 184 Join date : 2009-08-14 Location : at your favorite tv show
 | Subject: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Tue Aug 25, 2009 5:40 pm | |
| Teen: mild violence, suggestive themes, use of chocolate Content Rated By ESRB( trademark used without permission)  i rated it myself XD the story tells about one character and it's two companions the main character is selected by you and the first part of the story changes depending of your main but the ending varies depending of some actions main characters Ray  - Spoiler:
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class:blader-duke complete name: Raymond Matthew Green age:16 sex:m weapon of choice:two handed blade birth:jul/3 character:he's a trainee swordsman whose temper leds him to weary situations, he is very nice with people but very insecure of himself he is one of the three choices for leadership, if you chose him the game will contain more fighting then everything, he's a great warrior but can't hold against lots of enemies, he's one of the only duke class characters and after he change classes he is unstoppable BIO:he is the son of a great friend of arthur's: who asked him to train ray, althought he's the youngest of his brothers, he has an innate talent yet undiscovered, when he joins the armada, he learns fom everyone and grows to a matture level, and his story begins his chosen weapon is the bastard sword 
May  - Spoiler:
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class:knight-commander complete name: mai raijin age:16 sex:f weapon of choice:knight lance birth:oct/30 character:she's a natural leader but she stills lack of self-confidence, she tinks too well at the situations and always has a solution, but dislike when things goes wrong because of her playing: she is one of the three mains to chose as leader, if you choose her the game will be more about tactics ad less fighting but still she'll have to take many enemies down BIO:at a young age she joined the Tamallian army to bring money to her family, but after the war she loses her beloved commander Glen, then she came to the New Troy island to be trained, then she met Arthur who decided to train her as a knight to return to the army. her chosen weapon is the holy lance of xandria 
Yayo  - Spoiler:
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class-thief-spy complete name:unknown(he calls himself lord Yayo of the llamas, don't ask why) age:14 sex:m weapon of choice: long dagger birth date:jun/28 character: nice kid, always trying to make everbody laugh, but he does a lot of thing than bring the team to the trouble, like stealing things when not asked for playing: the last one of the three guys to choose, with him it'll be more about exploring and retrieving items, still he has to fight, but he's not good at that, but when he changes to spy class, he'll be a great fighter his weapon of choice is the famous stilleto dagger BIO:he was a former memer of a thieves band called the Deceivers, this band endlessly steals people's goods for surveying, but after he tried to steal arthur , he was caught and in order to set free he has to become his personal spy 
other Arthur  - Spoiler:
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class:master complete name:Arthur Raphael Lionerth age:29 sex:m weapon of choice:longsword birth date:feb/2 character: he is a teacher of life lessons and likes to joke when he can, he's always there to help playing:he's the teacher of your main and the two of your characters, he leads the armada and he's the strongest fighter, but he only helps you when you REALLY heed him BIO:he was once known on this world as the leader of the most famous traveling heroes group; the Armada XVI, after he left, all around how he got his mysterious armor and how he grow that strong remains unknown.... his weapon of choice is the sword than chose him, th Urkhassus, another enigmatic item 
Geoff  - Spoiler:
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class:bowmen-hunter/freeshoter complete name:Geoffen Von Elwood age:17 sex:m weapon of choice: short bow birth date:dec:19 character:a little grouchy, he tries to live quietly but he also wants not to be a burden, he's very talented but very lazy BIO:he was the son of the mayor of New Troy who died the last battle in hands of a evil wizard, after that he joined Arthur to grow and soon become the mayor, but he hadn't the chance, now he's the keeper of the three kids and that's why he has a brotherhood's loathe against Arthur his weapon of choice is a wooden bow 
Blade:  - Spoiler:
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class:raider-verdugo complete name:Elvira Maria Alexandre(she calls herself Blader cause that name embarasses her) age:17 sex:f weapon of choice:giant ax birth date:apr/22 character:excessive outgoing, she's alwas energetic and never stop training, she has an unhuman strenght from her father whose she is trying to make proud, also, she tends to be a bit silly sometimes BIO:she requested his father to join Arthur on his journey, now she's the co-keeper of the new heroes alongside Geoff her weapon oif choice is the Barbussei, the master axe 
Razor  - Spoiler:
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class:verdugo complete name: Reznor Franchesco Alexandre(formerly known as General Razor/ now he's known as Big Daddy/Blade's father, good guess) age:42(kinda old the dude) sex:m weapon of choice:any axe or pole blade he can brandish birth date:aug/13 character:just as energeic and strong as his daughter, this guy likes to live freely and become stronger, but he's also a serious man when the situation hard, he dislike cowardly more than anything so he tries to make everyone become strong in his team BIO: he was a fearsome general in charge of an army who tried to take over Tamallia, the larges territory of the continent, but he was beaten by Arthur and the Armada XVI, now he's a member of his new armada and personal craftsman his weapon of choice is the PaPa Blade, his personal axe 
Karie  - Spoiler:
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class:duke complete name: her real name is unknown, but she was called Karen Angelo when she was adopted age:apparently 18 sex:f weapon of choice:rapier and massive shield birth date:may/29 character:generally she's always calm and only knowns the happiness and sadness, no other emotions can she feel BIO:we don't know, the only thing we know she was beside arthur 3 years before i (the main character) her weapon of choice is the astral shield and the valkyrie's sword (ILLUSTRATION PENDING)
Enemies Rouzen  - Spoiler:
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class:dark god complete name:Rouzen Kisemerh, the dark god age:his appearance suggest 32 years sex:m(maybe) weapon of choice:rapier birth date:jan/1 character:Excessively evil, only acts for someone's demise, he is a very smart and strong person and due to his power he never feels fear of anything, even when he's at disadvantage, he is immortal and his only desire is to finally find a end to his life and for that he provokes the world to stop him, he has a connection to the enigmatic story of Arthur BIO:nothing, only he knows about him his weapon of choice is the half-part of the Urkhassus, the Fimmbaal 
the story Arthur is a well-known hero in the continent of (name not decided yet), after he accomplished his unknown objective, his only mission was to take care of three kids who wants to grow strongers beside him. They were selected to missions in charge of Blade and Geoff, experienced warriors who knew Arthur long ago, their missions were from protecting villages to chase bounty hunters. After that a big mission came around, it happens than someone is scheming to take over the kingdom of Tamallia, this man name was Lord Vellian, a sorcerer with mischievous powers, after they chase after him they find out than Vellian is under control of Rouzen whose happens to be a Dark God, the three heroes asked Arthur for answers but he sem not wiling to answer. the three heroes researched on Arthur's personal library and then they found out than... _ He is the Astral hero who once fought the odds to bring safety to the galaxy, than he fought along and against gods, and than Rouzen was behind all of that, Rouzen is the god who rules the Dark Nebula:a place when evil returns after death All of this was impossible to believe, then Karie, Arthur's main assistant explained them about that, seeking for the truth the heroes chase after Arthur and then they winess a battle between Those Two. Rouzen defeted arthur and said: these kids know about us, perhaps they will be as fun as you are. And then he fled, arthur then told them all he knows, three days passed and Arthur discovered where Rouzen was and he chased after him, the heroes were going to help him but he said: _No, you guys stay here, this is far more dangerous than you think, wait for me, i'll be backthe guys ignored his advice and silently they followed him, he catch them at the time he knew they were there, he said then: - Ah, guess i can't stop you, well you may come but do not interfere, stay hide, don't let he see you guys, this one is SERIOUSLY,at the time they fought rouzen said, do you know why i came here?Arthur said then: to take me down finally nope, i came here to provoke the powers of the Astral Flux, arthur seems impressed, then he continued speaking - the astral flux is the main source of energy of the entire universe, if the astrral flux sees there's a power then may cause problems to the galaxy, then it'll explode and destroy all in there, even the gods So, i decided to use that power to bring the world down by once and then Rouzen showed up all of his collosal power, which warned the astral flux, and then the explosion started ...........it..is.....i..it's over? Not yet rouzen apparently drained the powers of the astral flux with the explosion and he said: At last, i am the strongest being in existence, if yoy still think you can stand against me, come to my castle at the top of the mountain, till now Survive When You Still Can. and he left flying with spreaded crimson wings looks like the time has come to us to stand against the very power than rules us: Arthur said the heroes, and the other warriors of Arthur's armada stand now in front of the Great Door Of Divinity, ready for the final showdown with the Perfect One. and so the story follows it's end the door opens in front of arthur and his comrades, they get into the castle, and they face all kind of ordeals, they're attacked by soldiers and monsters, as the battle grow fierce they marched forward looking for the key than opens the Last Frontier Door, then they faced enemies from the past, and after they struggled them to death the key appeared at the lock, the Door opened by itself and a cold air blewed from the entrance. there is he waiting for the heroes, no more turning back from this point - Congratulations, you made it, i was sure you would surely overcome the trials, but, no matter how much power you do have, i have more, and the faith you have won't save you, for all your hope dies here, and your fate is under my Divine judgement: final quote from Rouzen, and then the final showdown begins _________________ you can save the world you can defeat the bad guy you can get away with the girl you can get all the reputation but if there's something few can do is CARD GAMES ON MOTORCYCLES!!!.
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|  | | ShadowKirby

Posts : 1313 Join date : 2009-08-11 Age : 24 Location : Eh?!
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Wed Aug 26, 2009 8:50 pm | |
| Nice drawings, they're awesome. And the sprites are great too. Except.... Razor... His sprites horrify me. _________________  |
|  | | <Na>Suliboy Admin

Posts : 632 Join date : 2009-08-11 Age : 25 Location : On the computer.
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Wed Aug 26, 2009 10:53 pm | |
| The drawings are amazing. Some sprites could use work though. _________________ Current Work: Marth; Zelda ; Lambo ; Bianchi ; Belphegor ; Ryohei; Dorothy; Sothe ; Micaiah ; Dragos ; Mochran ; Acuine; Chrome and Mukuro ; Squalo; Adult Reborn; SSF2 FoS
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|  | | Crater

Posts : 323 Join date : 2009-08-14 Age : 22 Location : Scatland
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Thu Aug 27, 2009 4:16 pm | |
| Geoffen's face looks like he has a few mental issues in the drawing. |
|  | | zilch

Posts : 184 Join date : 2009-08-14 Location : at your favorite tv show
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Fri Aug 28, 2009 2:43 pm | |
| - CRaTeR wrote:
- Geoffen's face looks like he has a few mental issues in the drawing.
Surely guys, i've posted the storyline, check it out _________________ you can save the world you can defeat the bad guy you can get away with the girl you can get all the reputation but if there's something few can do is CARD GAMES ON MOTORCYCLES!!!.
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|  | | zilch

Posts : 184 Join date : 2009-08-14 Location : at your favorite tv show
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Wed Sep 23, 2009 1:06 pm | |
| - zilch wrote:
- Congratulations, you made it, i was sure you would surely overcome the trials, but, no matter how much power you do have, i have more, and the faith you have won't save you, for all your hope dies here, and your fate is under my Divine judgement
how does this sounds? _________________ you can save the world you can defeat the bad guy you can get away with the girl you can get all the reputation but if there's something few can do is CARD GAMES ON MOTORCYCLES!!!.
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|  | | <Na>Suliboy Admin

Posts : 632 Join date : 2009-08-11 Age : 25 Location : On the computer.
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Wed Sep 23, 2009 4:33 pm | |
| It sounds grammatically painful. _________________ Current Work: Marth; Zelda ; Lambo ; Bianchi ; Belphegor ; Ryohei; Dorothy; Sothe ; Micaiah ; Dragos ; Mochran ; Acuine; Chrome and Mukuro ; Squalo; Adult Reborn; SSF2 FoS
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|  | | ShadowKirby

Posts : 1313 Join date : 2009-08-11 Age : 24 Location : Eh?!
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Wed Sep 23, 2009 6:10 pm | |
| - zilch wrote:
- zilch wrote:
- Congratulations, you made it, i was sure you would surely overcome the trials, but, no matter how much power you do have, i have more, and the faith you have won't save you, for all your hope dies here, and your fate is under my Divine judgement
how does this sounds?
..... Do you pass English class? I tried editing it a bit: "Congratulations, you made it. I was sure you would overcome the trials, but no matter how much power you do have, I hold more, your the faith won't save you, for all your hopes die here; under my Divine Judgment lies your fate." I haven't had English in a while either, its coming up in my next semester. _________________  |
|  | | <Na>Suliboy Admin

Posts : 632 Join date : 2009-08-11 Age : 25 Location : On the computer.
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Wed Sep 23, 2009 6:58 pm | |
| - ShadowKirby wrote:
- zilch wrote:
- zilch wrote:
- Congratulations, you made it, i was sure you would surely overcome the trials, but, no matter how much power you do have, i have more, and the faith you have won't save you, for all your hope dies here, and your fate is under my Divine judgement
how does this sounds? ..... Do you pass English class? I tried editing it a bit:
"Congratulations, you made it. I was sure you would overcome the trials, but no matter how much power you do have, I hold more, your the faith won't save you, for all your hopes die here; under my Divine Judgment lies your fate."
I haven't had English in a while either, its coming up in my next semester.
I edited it a bit more to be more of a passive voice. "Congratulations, you have made it. I was sure you would overcome the trials, but despite how much power you grasp, I have more; your faith won't save you, for all your hopes die here - under my Divine Judgment lies your fate." I grammar nazi'd a bit too. _________________ Current Work: Marth; Zelda ; Lambo ; Bianchi ; Belphegor ; Ryohei; Dorothy; Sothe ; Micaiah ; Dragos ; Mochran ; Acuine; Chrome and Mukuro ; Squalo; Adult Reborn; SSF2 FoS
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|  | | ShadowKirby

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 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Wed Sep 23, 2009 8:11 pm | |
| That's much better. _________________  |
|  | | zilch

Posts : 184 Join date : 2009-08-14 Location : at your favorite tv show
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Thu Sep 24, 2009 1:43 pm | |
| - <Na>Suliboy wrote:
I edited it a bit more to be more of a passive voice.
"Congratulations, you have made it. I was sure you would overcome the trials, but despite how much power you grasp, I have more; your faith won't save you, for all your hopes die here - under my Divine Judgment lies your fate."
I grammar nazi'd a bit too.
damn, english classes won't help me up with this of dramatic quotes curse...you...zelda, curse...you...sages, curse.. you....... suli when my grammar improves to a proffesional level, i will return and insult your descendants, as long as i have the keyboard in my hand _________________ you can save the world you can defeat the bad guy you can get away with the girl you can get all the reputation but if there's something few can do is CARD GAMES ON MOTORCYCLES!!!.
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|  | | ShadowKirby

Posts : 1313 Join date : 2009-08-11 Age : 24 Location : Eh?!
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Fri Sep 25, 2009 6:37 pm | |
| Lolwut, you'll need a lot of help. _________________  |
|  | | Amamihe

Posts : 15 Join date : 2010-05-05 Age : 62 Location : Connecticut
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Tue Jul 06, 2010 1:34 pm | |
| I love the storyline, but the grammar needs to be revised a little |
|  | | indianchan

Posts : 454 Join date : 2009-08-12 Age : 23
 | Subject: Re: zilch storyline) Astral justice:Conflict Tue Jul 06, 2010 1:42 pm | |
| - Amamihe wrote:
- I love the storyline, but the grammar needs to be revised a little
Last post was in September of last year, you sir, can choke on a dick. |
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